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    Night is gone,
    Morning’s long.
    Find your feet and make the beat.

    Building’s cold,
    Smell of mold.
    What a way to fade the days.

    Mind is numb,
    Air is glum.
    Pass a sheet, rinse and repeat.

    Time is still,
    Take a pill.
    Mad despair, try not to care.

    Day is done,
    Rain has come.
    Earn your pay and die away.

    Bottled dreams,
    Silent screams.
    Dull the pain, forget again.

    Cry alone,
    Seeds are sown.
    Make your peace, a life to lease.
     
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    feels a bit short
     
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    I only said what I had to say. I'm working on a much longer narrative that is taking me quite a bit more time than the hour or so this took.
     
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    I await it my fellow man
     
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    It might be a good bit of time.
     
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    still I wait
     
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    A poem is as long as it needs to be.
     
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    Who judges what art is the artist or the viewer?
     
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    It makes good use of rhyming and keeps a good line length for each line. However, this kind of poetry really doesn't speak to me, so my opinion on it is marred. Still, it is an objectively good poem.
     

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